Have you ever wondered what school is better? Hoehne or Trinidad.
Hoehne is rated one of the top rated schools in Colorado. [thesis] It is better because it is safer and it is in a great community. Body Para 1
[Topic sentence] At Hoehne you will always feel safe. [SDS#1] Hoehne has security cameras everywhere to monitor the school. [ E-Elaboration #1]just the other day a kid got caught vandalizing the school.
Body Para 2 Hoehne isn’t just safe it has awesome sports. [SDS #1] The volleyball and football records speak for themselves. [SDS # 2] Hoehne has great coaches who teach you everything you need to know. E-Elaboration #2]
Infact with are coaches help this year we are so close to going to state again!
[SDS #3] Hoehne athletes take their grades seriously so they are always eligible to play.[ E-Elaboration#3] Trinidad many students are ineligible to play sports because they are so caught up in their gangs that they don’t care about their grades.
Hoehne also doesn’t dress like Trinidad. [SDS#1] We care about are grades more than our style. [E-Elaboration# 2] Infact more kids get better grades when their not worrying about how they look. In Trinidad most people only care about how they look.
[Conclusion] Hoehne is clearly a great school, much better than Trinidad.
We have a safe community, great sports and we care about our grades. At Hoehne you get a great education and some awesome scholar ships. No drugs and No gangs. Hoehne is the way to go.
Hoehne Trinidad
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